Thanks for reading! I must admit that I... didn't remember if koyukkuris call themselves with the prefix "ko". It had been a while...
Nothing that can't be corrected in future stories.
Was lenght an issue? The initial draft featured a lot that was cut out like
-Alice's initial story
-Alice after leaving the village
-Chen's role, severely reduced
and a couple of other stuff. I think I cut away as much as I could, but I'm not good judge of myself.
For the next story I'd like to make a slightly atypical Family Friendly story. Let's see what happens...